Dallas Tillman

It is actually supposed to be a song. (Forgive me for placing it in the wrong section; I'm new here). Thus, the six lines repeated through the poem is the ...

Capitalize a word in two conditions: end of sentence or new line, but not both at the same time. Nice extended metaphor for the "birds." Also, to make the poem ...

Most important line in the 1st stanza: "Let me be the light to guide you through the storm." This is saying: "Don't be afraid of challenges that come your way. ...

On the contrary, this pen has quite some ink left. The imagery creates a depressing tone, leaving the reader to feel "Has this writer sucked up every last amount of ...

I know the general tone sounds sexual, but please do not interpret it that way. It is written in the style of one lover/friend saying to the other: "Don't worry ...

Lie down, lie down, my friend. Have no fear; the storm shall pass. Close your eyes, pay no mind to the wind. Have no fear; the storm shall pass. Relax, ...

Great work, though try to be more involved in your work. It is as if you are detatched, outside of your work. Put your heart and soul into writing and ...

Quite nice... very dark. Interesting imagery. It enhances the dark/almost depressing tone of the poem/song. As for punctuation and spelling mistakes, none seen. I must say that you don't have ...

Standing on foreign ground To distant to recieve your warming rays. The ice on my barren surface Wraps around me like a frozen blanket Ever longing for you to come ...

The sun shone brightly over the seaside village of Nogune. Its rays sparkled and shimmered as they danced on the surface of the crystal clear ocean. The waves lapped the ...